TSome people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Task Achievement
Make sure to introduce both sides of the argument briefly, even if you're going to focus on one side for a more balanced introduction.
Task Achievement
Increase the clarity of your stance throughout the essay to avoid any ambiguity regarding your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance flow and coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize paragraphs clearly with one main idea per paragraph and use topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your points, helping to create a persuasive argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay was well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which made it easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite