Your child is going on a trip to another country for 3 days. School is looking for some parents who can join the trip and you decided to apply for the same. You are interested in going with trip. Write a letter to the head of the school and include: – Why you want to join the team – What you can do to assist – Queries related to the trip.
Dear Leaders School, I appreciate your interest and your desire to give a good chance to let our children discover and learn from having
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adventure with their own friends, I would like to join the parents group, it's very exciting to watch our toddlers having fun with their friends and learning how to make a good teamwork without their parents, I'll be there for the emergencies and be a supporter for the kids, we could cook together as a parents group and helping supervisors to help if needed and helping with school stuff.
I have a few questions about the trip time, just want to make sure we can get back before Sunday morning because we need to make a plan for his birthday,
And if we should be nearby to be ready to take him home.
Thank you and I hope you guys have a good day.
Best regards.
Ms. Willy SmithSubmitted by x.ra5eelah on
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structure
Consider using clearer paragraph breaks to enhance readability.
tone
Address your letter more specifically to the Head of the School, such as 'Dear Head Teacher' or 'Dear [Name],' for a more personalized touch.
tone
End your letter with a more formal closing if appropriate, such as 'Yours sincerely' followed by your full name.
content
You clearly express your enthusiasm and support for the trip, which is great.
content
Your offer to assist reflects well on your willingness to be involved, enhancing the letter's positive tone.
engagement
Asking specific questions shows your engagement and interest in the details of the trip, which is very good.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite