Young people who commit serious crimes such as roberry or violent attacts should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It has been said that youngsters should be punished in the same manner as adults,

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committing crimes,

such

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as attacks and robbery. I partially disagree with

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statement and the points supporting my view will be discussed in

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essay. Some believe that equal penalties should be given to teenagers

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the following reasons.

Firstly

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punishment

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should be given regardless of age, because providing leniency to one group will somehow reduce the fear of penalty in others.

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, when the juvenile criminal of the Abhaya gang rape case in Delhi, was sent to a rehabilitation centre merely for 3 months and later got released, many young generations realized the loopholes in the Indian judiciary, which encouraged them to commit more crimes.

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such

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considerations would be unfair to the victims, since they will not be compensated properly for their financial, emotional and mental loss.

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, young people

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violence

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, as they are influenced by factors

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as TV

programs

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and video games.

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, it is evident that adolescents who watch

programs

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having more violence are more likely to develop criminal behaviour.

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, government and adults should control the content of the program, rather than punishing them.

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, counselling

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or proper education should be imparted as

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so that they can differentiate between wrong and right actions in their future life.

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, many youths are involved in criminal activities.

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, it is considered that the same

punishment

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should be provided for them, similar to adults because it will be an example for teenagers to avoid crime.

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, I believe the situation should be considered

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punishing them and counselling

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should be important

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punishment

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