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In some countries, the widespread internet gives freedom for study and work at home instead of traveling to work and college. To what extent the advantages outweigh the disagvantages.

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Nowadays, internet access has become easy and faster. Many countries have allowed their
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 and even
students
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 to stay at home for their
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 and study.
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, they are not required to go out. Many of them are encouraging the style of
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 and learning system, but there is an argument that it has adverse effects and I
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 agree with those who argue that negative aspects outweigh the advantages.
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, with the widespread use of the Internet, many countries have accepted their
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 can
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 from their place and
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 can
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 attend their classes remotely.
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 gives the same flexibility in
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 for
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 and now they need not worry about their office timings as it is very difficult to reach their workplace on time.
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, for
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also
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 virtual learning completely
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 carrying their heavy bags and gives them more free time to spend on their activities.
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, when the workforce and
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 are not going out
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 it will increase the space on roads and less traffic, so that the air pollution can be reduced.
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,
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-from-home and online learning is resulting inactive lifestyle as people and
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 are not involved in physical movement
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 as walking.
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, they are not able to interact with others personally
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 as meeting colleagues.
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, a case study recently proves that for the
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 few years, obesity cases have spiked
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this
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 inactive lifestyle.
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 is a serious issue and
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 can be reduced if
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 and
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 go to the office and school. In conclusion, though there are few positive results with working from home and studying remotely.
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, the negative results outweigh the advantages and nations should rethink their decision and allow
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 and
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 their normal style of
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 and study.

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introduction and conclusion
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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