In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
In some nations, people are getting heavier, and standards of health and well-being are falling.
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essay will suggest that the principal cause of these issues is the type of nourishment they are eating and submit a government education program as a viable solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
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raised awareness of the problem would lead many people to start a healthier regime. Linking Words
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, the U.K. recently lobbied their citizens to eat 5 pieces of fruit and vegetables a day and Linking Words
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