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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table compares the number of
visitors
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 who visited the Ashdown Museum before and after restoration,
whereas
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 the pie graph, the information from the survey done on
visitors
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 during the same two years, is depicted.
Overall
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, the number of people and the rate of satisfied
visitors
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 has increased post-reconstruction of the museum.
According to
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 the first chart before restoration, 74000
visitors
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 have seen the museum,
while
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 the figure for them increased by 18000, to 92000. The second graph shows half of
visitors
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 were dissatisfied and very dissatisfied, followed by those satisfied (30%).
Moreover
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, the proportion of people not respond and were very satisfied together totalling one-fifth.
Furthermore
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, during post-reconstruction, one-quarter of the results were allocated to those who were dissatisfied, very satisfied, and had no response. More than two-thirds of
visitors
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 were very satisfied and satisfied which accounted for two-fifths and 35 %.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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