Although family is a powerful influence on child's life, it is also influenced from outside the home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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, the education system is an essential contributor to the kid's way of life. As a part of the educational organisations' schools and kindergartens have their own programs to create particular knowledge, behaviours and skills in the pupils. Linking Words
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have given a number of home tasks that keep them busy during the rest of the day. Linking Words
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, my nephew studied in the middle school. Before we almost every day keep in touch with each other and spent Linking Words
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to talk with his parents. Sometimes it seems like he does not want to speak at all.
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, the social environment is another important factor that has an influence on young people's lives. The neighbourhood in which kids live , the people that they contact and the friends that they play and interact with on a daily basis can determine the way in which they live. On top of that, there is Linking Words
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multimedia that has another gradually growing impact on kids' behaviour. Everyone can admit that social media with strong influencers has already taken over even adult audiences and it's a matter of Linking Words
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, the school where I work currently, cannot be proud of its pupils' behaviours, because smoking is widespread among the students. To my mind, Linking Words
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the family can control the child's behaviour, it cannot be the main factor in determining how the children live. There are literacy system and surroundings which has a powerful impact on the kids.Linking Words
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