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The following maps show the the changes of the town Springer from 1970 until now.

The following maps show the the changes of the town Springer from 1970 until now.
The maps illustrate the developments that took place in the coastal
town
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Springer from 1970 until now.    
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, a comparison of
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from a largely rural to a mainly urban
area
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.     In the year 1970, the
town
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 was a much greener residential
area
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 with a large number of trees, but by
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 year's time, the
town
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 had undergone a number of significant changes. The most noticeable is that most trees were chopped down. Individual houses were demolished, and
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 of them, more apartments were built. If, in 1970, the
area
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 of farmland was expanded,
this
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area
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 is now diminished. In the 1970s, the
center
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 of the
town
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 had only one shop,
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, nowadays, the
center
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 school has six shops surrounding it.
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 development was the construction of an airport in the north corner of the city.
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, only a few trees near the airport remained.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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