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The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.
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The given table illustrates provided data about transportation
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 railway in
Malaysia
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,
Canada
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,
China
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 and
UAE
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, in 3 different categories.
Overall
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 it can be seen that
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China
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's railway has the most popularity in comparison with other
counteries
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countries
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 has the highest
capicity
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capacity
 of commuters to transport. Though
Canada
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 carried the highest amount of cargo among the others. In
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 of people using rail transport,
China
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 has a striking difference with others with 27 million.
Malaysia
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 and
UAE
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 are in the second and third place with 5.9 and 5.5 million and
Canada
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 is in the bottom of the list with only 0.3 million.
China
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 owned the first place in passenger kilometres per head of population group as well.
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this number
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is
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 780 and 770 for
UAE
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 and
Malaysia
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.
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,
Canada
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 is still the least with 80.
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Canada
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 carried 28.20
billions
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of
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tones
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tonnes
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 of cargo which is the
toppest
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and
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following
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 by
China
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,
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malaysia
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Malaysia
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 and
UAE
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 with 23.01, 22.2 and 21.9
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of
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tons respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, canada, china, uae with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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