The best way to solve the environmental problem is to increase fuel prices. Agree or disagree
The concern to save the Earth's environment is widespread.
While
some believe that increasing fuel prices could be a solution, I disagree. I think we need to explore other solutions to mitigate this
problem as well.
To begin
with, one of the major contributors to environmental damage is carbon emissions. To address this
issue, the government can encourage people
to switch to electric vehicles which can potentially prevent further
harm to the environment. In addition
, authorities should invest in improving the quality and availability of public transportation, thereby providing people
with an alternative to personal vehicles. For instance
, the implementation of such
measures in Tokyo has resulted in a significant reduction in carbon emissions.
Therefore
, this
action helps Tokyo to take out, from the list of most polluted cities in the world
Furthermore
, deforestation is a major cause of environmental damage. The government should arrange an awareness campaign on this
issue and urge people
to plant trees on their land. This
can be beneficial in reviving natural habitats. For instance
, in India, almost 1 million trees were planted when the Prime Minister requested people
to do so. However
, while
the price hike can discourage the excessive use of personal vehicles to some extent, other solutions should also
be imposed in order to save nature.
In conclusion, the government can play a vital role in addressing this
problem by implementing strict laws and spreading awareness about this
issue. However
, people
should also
do their part in helping to solve this
problem.Submitted by gurisidhu95214 on
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Task Achievement
Make sure your essay addresses all parts of the prompt effectively. While your position is clear, expanding on how increasing fuel prices might not be the most effective solution with more detailed comparisons could strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Try to connect your ideas more seamlessly within paragraphs to enhance readability.
Language
Use a wider range of sentence structures and lexical resources to make your argument more compelling. This could improve the reader's engagement and your score.
Content
Effective use of specific examples, such as the initiatives in Tokyo and India, to support your arguments.
Structure
Clear structure with well-defined paragraphs and a logical flow of ideas.
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