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65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

65.The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the career that Anthropology graduates in one university choose to apply and the table presents the fraction of their incomes after five years of
work
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it is clear that
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graduands
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 tend to
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 in full-time jobs
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 they are not interested in part-time
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 and postgrad study.
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, most students gain a salary
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 than $75,000 except the ones who
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 in private companies.
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 with, the full-time job occupies well over one-half followed by the part-time job and unemployed which is about 15% and 12% respectively. Both full-time postgrad group study and the undeclare are at the same percentage, which is 8%.
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, graduates attend part-time
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 and postgrad study the least which is at 5% only.
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, there are four groups of earnings comprising $25,000-$49,999/ $50,000-74,999 / $75,000-$99,999 and $100,000. After five years of working, completers who are working as freelance consultants have their incomes at 5%, 15%, 40% and 40% in order. The government sector
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 has almost the same ratio compared to the first one which is 5%, 15%, 30% and 50%.
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, private organisations pay the lowest, at 10%, 35%, 25% and 30%.
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