The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.
The line graph represents the price of bananas in four different countries:
Japan
, France, Germany
, and USA
, indicated as US Correct article usage
the USA
dollar
per kilogram between 1994 and 2004.
Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the bananas sale
in Fix the agreement mistake
sales
Japan
and the states experienced an upward trend, whereas
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
of in
Change preposition
apply
Germany
and France underwent a downward trend during the following timeframe.
To begin
with, in 1994, at about 1.8 was the highest sales among the other three nations, followed by France, Germany
, and America, at around 1.6, 1.4, and 0.8 US dollars per kilogram, respectively. However
, it is note
that only Change the verb form
is noted
Japan
reached its peak at 2.8 US dollars per kilogram in the years after before dramatically fall
down to its past figure, Wrong verb form
falling
while
others experiencing
fluctuation Wrong verb form
experienced
of
the price. Change preposition
in
Hence
, in 1998-1999, the sale
figures Fix the agreement mistake
sales
of
the three countries constantly Change preposition
for
rising
except that Wrong verb form
rose
of in
America Change preposition
for
that
gradually Correct pronoun usage
which
decrease
.
In regards Wrong verb form
decreased
with
, Change preposition
to
in
1999 Change preposition
apply
untill
2004, in 2001 Correct your spelling
until
Japan
and Germany
sales' figure dropped Change noun form
Germany's
at
1.7 and at 1.4, respectively, Change preposition
to
whereas
that of the other two remain
stable. During the first 4 years of the twentieth century, the price of Wrong verb form
remained
banana
in Fix the agreement mistake
bananas
Japan
skyrocketed at
2.5 which outnumbered that of the other three nations.Change preposition
to
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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