The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
The line graph illustrates the figure of people
participate
in 4 different kinds of sports: Wrong verb form
participating
basketball
, Use synonyms
tennis
, Use synonyms
badminton
, and Use synonyms
rugby
, in a particular region over two decades starting in 1985.
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Overall
, it can be clearly observed that Linking Words
tennis
experienced an upward trend, Use synonyms
whereas
that of Linking Words
rugby
underwent a downward trend. Use synonyms
However
, it is interesting to note that both figures Linking Words
Change preposition
for
of
Change preposition
for
basketball
and Use synonyms
badminton
remain stable throughout the given timeframe.
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To begin
with, in 1985, at around 240 Linking Words
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peoples
, Fix the agreement mistake
people
rugby
was the highest participants among Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the others
others
three activities, followed by Correct quantifier usage
other
tennis
, Use synonyms
basketball
, and Use synonyms
badminton
, at 150 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
peoples
, at 80 Fix the agreement mistake
people
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peoples
, and Fix the agreement mistake
people
60
Change preposition
at 60
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peoples
, respectively.
In regards Fix the agreement mistake
people
with
the following 10 years, from 1995 to 2005, Change preposition
to
although
the number of players in Linking Words
tennis
and Use synonyms
rugby
have Use synonyms
exact
same figure at 200 Add an article
the exact
an exact
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peoples
, the popularity of the two activities Fix the agreement mistake
people
seem
to shift alternatively. Correct subject-verb agreement
seems
While
Linking Words
tenis
Correct your spelling
tennis
player
gradually Fix the agreement mistake
players
increasd
and reached Correct your spelling
increased
its
peak at an Correct pronoun usage
their
estimate
Replace the word
estimated
of
220 Change preposition
apply
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peoples
, the Fix the agreement mistake
people
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
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rugby's
players dropped miserably to only 50 Change noun form
rugby
persons
.
Unlike the other two sports that experience either the rise Replace the word
people
and
fall of Correct word choice
or
its
participants, Correct pronoun usage
their
basketball
and Use synonyms
badminton
's popularity remain the same at around 80 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
peoples
, and 60 Fix the agreement mistake
people
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peoples
with Fix the agreement mistake
people
a small changes
of no more than 5-10 Correct the article-noun agreement
a small change
small changes
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peoples
.Fix the agreement mistake
people
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words basketball, tennis, badminton, rugby, peoples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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