two pie chart give the result of survey in the museum in after and previous year

two pie chart give the result of survey in the museum in after and previous year
The pie charts illustrate the aftermath of surveys among the guests. Meanwhile, it is a comparison between the former and the later years about
people
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people's
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respose
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response
.
Overall
, before transformation,
people
who were dissatisfied had a lion's share.
Although
no response from visitors is constant.
however
, After changes more
people
are very satisfied. Looking at the pie charts, it is crystal clear that previously the majority of
people
were dissatisfied 40% and later the ratio declined to 15%.
Whereas
, very satisfied surged to double 35% as in the past it stood at 15% and no response from tourists has recorded the same
percentileof
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percentile of
percentile
5% in both years. Moving towards the rest of the information, satisfaction was 30% before transforming the museum as it climbed dramatically to 10%.
People
who were very dissatisfied were 10% and after some
development
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it fell to half.
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