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two pie chart give the result of survey in the museum in after and previous year

two pie chart give the result of survey in the museum in after and previous year
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The pie charts illustrate the aftermath of surveys among the guests. Meanwhile, it is a comparison between the former and the later years about
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people
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respose
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response
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, before transformation,
people
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 who were dissatisfied had a lion's share.
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 no response from visitors is constant.
however
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, After changes more
people
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 are very satisfied. Looking at the pie charts, it is crystal clear that previously the majority of
people
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 were dissatisfied 40% and later the ratio declined to 15%.
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, very satisfied surged to double 35% as in the past it stood at 15% and no response from tourists has recorded the same
percentileof
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percentile of
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 5% in both years. Moving towards the rest of the information, satisfaction was 30% before transforming the museum as it climbed dramatically to 10%.
People
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 who were very dissatisfied were 10% and after some
development
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 it fell to half.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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