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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured
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The process diagram presents a serial process of producing
instant
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 noodles throughout 8 steps.
Overall
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, the main ingredients of
instant
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 noodles are flour, water and oil. The
instant
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 noodles will be packed in a
labeled
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labelled
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cup
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 and sealed to protect the inside.
Firstly
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, the raw material is stored in a tall and big storage silos, waiting its time to go through the manufacturing process. Once it's ready, the flour is mixed with water and oil resulting
a
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dough texture. After that, the dough is pressed and shaped into a thin and wide sheet.
Next,
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the dough is cut into long strips
noodle
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-shaped.
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 the strips
is
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 rolled into a
noodle
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 disc and deep fried in oil to make it dry.
As a result
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, it becomes an
instant
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noodle
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.
This
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instant
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noodle
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 will be placed in a
cup
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 complimented with vegetables and spices. At
last
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, the
cup
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 is processed inside a square machine to stick the
instant
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noodle
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 brand label and seal the
cup
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 as the final touch.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, cup, noodle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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