The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia´s share of the Japanese tourist markey. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia´s share of the Japanese tourist markey. 

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the number of Japanese travellers in millions who are going out of Japan and the line figure presents the proportion of Japanese sightseers who choose
Australia
as their destination. Both data were shown between 1985 and 1995.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the trend of tourists in Japan is getting higher throughout the period.
Moreover
,
Australia
's share mostly shoots up except
two
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years.
To begin
with, in 1985, the total of vacationers started at 5 before continuously escalating to 11 in 1990. A slight drop was seen in 1991 by 0.5 and it increased again to just over 12 in 1992.
Further
, after spending one year to remain constant, it surged and reached a peak at 15 in the
last
year of the record.
Additionally
, the share of Japanese travellers in
Australia
was 2% in the year 1985. It soared to well under 5 in 1988
while
went down to 4.2% in 1989.
Besides
, in 1990, a rocket up to the same fraction as in 1988 was seen and
then
it gradually jumped and arrived at approximately 6.2% in 1993.
Last
but not least,
the
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Australia
's share was minimally decreased to exactly 6% in 1994.
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