Your rental accommodation was recently damaged due to bad weather. Write a letter to the landlord and say • Explain what caused the damage • Why do you need them to fix the problem right away • What needs to be done to fix it
Dear Mr.Paul,
I am writing with regard to the recent damage
of
our house that has occurred Change preposition
to
due to
bad weather on 21 September. Unfortunately, last
night, as a result
of heavy rain and thunder, windows
of the living room have been broken. To more matters worth, some bricks of walls which surrounded the yard fell on the ground.
Given the fact that these damages pose some adverse threads for our family in house. Correct article usage
the windows
Then
we need to fix these problems as soon possible
. Change preposition
as possible
As a result
of these breaking windows, our security saw a significant reduction and we cannot ensure our safety. In addition
, these fallen bricks have established some obstacles on the pavement.
Finally
, owing to fixing windows and walls some measures should be done
. We need to call some Verb problem
taken
labors
in order to help us repair them. Change the spelling
labours
In addition
, we should buy extra bricks, cement and glass so as to make the damaged parts correctly.
I look forward to receiving your response according to
these problems.
Yours sincerely,
Ali KermaniSubmitted by kargar.mh1992 on
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task achievement
Consider rephrasing some sentences for clarity. For example, 'To more matters worth' can be changed to 'To make matters worse.'
coherence cohesion
Divide the information into more organized paragraphs to enhance readability. For instance, a separate paragraph for the request to fix the problem immediately.
task achievement
Good use of polite language and appropriate tone for writing to a landlord.
task achievement
Clear explanation of the issue and its consequences, addressing all parts of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Effective greeting and closing that frame the letter well.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite