The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The line chart illustrates how many people
had
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visited a particular Caribbean
Island
from 2010 until 2017 as
tourists
.
Firstly
, the total
number
of
tourists
increased dramatically. At the beginning of the period, the
number
of
tourists
accounted for 1
million
individuals,
while
0.25
million
came from
cruise
ships and 1.75
million
were hosted on the
island
. The
number
of
visitors
constantly increased until 2015,
then
remained stable at 2.75
million
for one year and after that rose rapidly, ending up at 3.5
million
, which is three and a half times more compared to the start point.
Secondly
,
visitors
from
cruise
ships
had
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become the majority. Started as a minority in 2010, they doubled their numbers in 2011,
then
went down to 0.25
million
in 2012 and constantly increased since
then
. On
contrary
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, the
number
of
visitors
who were accommodated on the
island
doubled between 2011 and 2013, peaked at 1.5
million
, but
then
, after 2015, surpassed by
cruise
ships’
tourists
, who represented 0.5
million
people more in 2017.
Overall
, the
number
of
tourists
that visited a Caribbean
Island
in a seven-year period increased substantially,
while
cruise
ships
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visitors
from the weakest group have become the majority, overcoming the
visitors
who stayed on the
island
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, tourists, number, million, cruise, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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