The bar chart shows attendance of people in different ages in music events in Australia in 2006

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of

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for three types of

music

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events: classical, opera and popular in Australia by 2006.

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, it is notable that all

age

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groups had the most people join in popular

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age

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over 45 and 55 years old.

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, at the

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of 45-54 and over 55, they rarely went to the

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events, which saw a lower

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the

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proportion of

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during the period shown.

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, there was 38% in the

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of people

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of 15 to 24 joined

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popular

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events, which was the highest figure in the chart. The rate for 25-34s in

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sector accounted for 27%, compared with 33% in the

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of 35-44s. there was a similar figure in the rate for

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and 25s

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who came to opera

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,

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for 13% and 14% respectively.

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, classical

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saw 11% in

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attendance

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in 15-24s and 35-44s,

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the 25-34s witnessed

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lower

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with just 8% Regarding

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the rate for 45-54s, whose

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in classical

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at 10%,

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over 55s received 7%. There was a similar proportion in opera

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, with 15% in both

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groups. Popular

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had 13% in the figure of 45-54s, which

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the 55s.