The bar chart shows attendance of people in difference ages in music events in Australia in 2006.

The bar chart shows attendance of people in difference ages in music events in Australia in 2006.
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Contained in the bar chart is data pertaining to the volume of people who attended three types of melody
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categorized by five distinct age groups in Australia during 2006.
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, the rate of attendance for popular music declined as the community aged.
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, society enjoyed classical least except the 55 plus group. Beginning with classical
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, which had small disparities between the five life groups. The percentages of people attending classical music
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whose ages ranged from 15 to 24, from 35 to 44 and from 45 to 54 were similar at about 11%.
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the rates of community in 25-34 and 55 plus age groups were the same at 8%. In terms of opera
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, individuals enjoyed about 14% of all ages. Moving onto the remaining figure, which changed depending on the increase in maturity. The percentage of attendance in popular music was led by the public at 15-40 at 38%, followed by the 35-44 age group at under 35%.
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, the level of 25-34 aged people enjoying popularity was approximately a third. Another point is that the 45-54 community enjoyed popular melody triple who were in 55 plus at 15% and 5% respectively.

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