The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

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values of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016.

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, Facebook’s

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constistently

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consistently

increased over the given time period,

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Yahoo’s,

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opposite steadily decreased.

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, Apple’s value fluctuated during the period and Google’s slightly unchanged.

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with, Facebook’s

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price consistently rose and reached a peak of about 20,000 in 2016. In 2011, Yahoo started with a similar value to Facebook, around 8,000.

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, it decreased year on year until it reached about 3,000 in 2016.

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price was about 5,000 in 2011 and it rose significantly to nearly 35,000 in 2012. In 2013, the value decreased dramatically

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6,000. It

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continued

to decline in 2014, around 12,000, and in the following years,

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fell to just over 5,000.

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Google’s

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stably unchanged at around 1,000 between 2011 and 2016.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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142 words

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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.