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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The line graph illustrates the
stock
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 values of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016.
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, Facebook’s
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constistently
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consistently
 increased over the given time period,
while
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 Yahoo’s,
to
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opposite steadily decreased.
Additionally
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, Apple’s value fluctuated during the period and Google’s slightly unchanged.
To begin
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 with, Facebook’s
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 price consistently rose and reached a peak of about 20,000 in 2016. In 2011, Yahoo started with a similar value to Facebook, around 8,000.
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, it decreased year on year until it reached about 3,000 in 2016.
In addition
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stock
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 price was about 5,000 in 2011 and it rose significantly to nearly 35,000 in 2012. In 2013, the value decreased dramatically
around
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 6,000. It
countinued
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continued
 to decline in 2014, around 12,000, and in the following years,
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the price
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 fell to just over 5,000.
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,
Google’s
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Google is
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 stably unchanged at around 1,000 between 2011 and 2016.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stock with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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