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A friend has told you that he or she feels lonely in their new city away from their family. Write to your friend, and •Explain why people can feel this way •Give some ideas on how to solve the problem •Ask your friend to contact you and tell you if this works

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Dear John I hope you’re well. I’ve just received your email and would like to give you some advice which help you to overcome your loneliness. As you know I immigrated a few years ago, so I exactly know how you feel. Just know that
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 it is normal to be homesick. The newcomers always feel isolated and they need some time to cope with their stress. At
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you find it difficult to make friends because of cultural differences, but little by little you learn how to adapt to all of these. Why don’t you join a sports club? You are always keen on yoga and you can meet new people with the same interests in the gym. And don’t forget to go to every annual event like Christmas party or Halloween, many young people come to these parties and you can talk to them or even give them your phone number. To be honest, I met Sam at my university Halloween party! Try these and I promise you will feel better. Please keep in touch and write to me about how you feel after these suggestions. If they work, I will try to think more to help you out of
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 situation. Take care and stay in touch, All the best, Negar

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Grammar and Syntax
There are a few minor grammatical errors and awkward sentence constructions. Ensure to review your text for these small mistakes to improve clarity.
Content and Ideas
It could be helpful to further develop some ideas, like how to meet more people outside of a sports club or events. Providing a bit more detail can enhance the helpfulness of your letter.
Tone
The tone of the letter is warm and supportive, which is perfectly suitable for the context of writing to a friend. This makes the letter feel genuine and empathetic.
Content and Ideas
The advice given is practical and actionable, providing clear steps and reasons why they might help which should be reassuring to the friend.
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