Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get new while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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news
from the radio
, while
other
argue that television is better in Fix the agreement mistake
others
convey
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conveying
news
to public
. Add an article
the public
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essay will discuss both views ,
and Remove the comma
apply
finally
will draw my own perspective.
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to new
new
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news
through
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on
radio
, Correct article usage
the radio
they
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apply
, mostly
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is that
are
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is mostly
on
listening rather than Change the preposition
in
see
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seeing
a pictures
. My father, Correct the article-noun agreement
pictures
a picture
for example
. Although
we have more than one Tv
at home, he every afternoon sit outside and Correct your spelling
TV
turn
off the Correct subject-verb agreement
turns
radio
. Other reasons
, individuals who are busy most of Fix the agreement mistake
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time
, Add an article
the time
they
prefer to hear Correct pronoun usage
apply
news
during doing their work to save their
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apply
time
, and in
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at
same
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the same
time
they know what is happen
around them.
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happening
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, others has
received Change the verb form
have
news
through the TV. Because they are visually
. They understand more by Replace the adverb
visual
hear
and Change the verb form
hearing
see
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seeing
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, me. I can not recognise meaning without see
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seeing
a
visual things.Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Besides
, same
people have a lot of leisure Correct your spelling
some
time
,which make
them Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
fell
bored . Correct your spelling
feel
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, they interested
in watching Add a missing verb
are interested
a
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the
news
from
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on
a
TV. Correct article usage
apply
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it Correct your spelling
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get
them fell busy .
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gets
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, some of population
prefer to hear Add an article
the population
news
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the news
by
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on
radio
,whilst Correct article usage
the radio
other
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others
interset
in watching it Correct your spelling
are interested
through
television.Change preposition
on
both
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of
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apply
way
are effective and interesting Fix the agreement mistake
ways
according to
their nature
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natural
of
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apply
personality
. To recommendations, governments should convey Fix the agreement mistake
personalities
news
to society by using both way
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ways
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task response
The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the essay's structure, which is good. However, there are a number of grammatical errors and awkward phrasings which make the essay difficult to follow at times. Try to proofread your essay to correct these mistakes.
task response
Your essay provides examples, which is great, but some of them are not clearly related to the points you are trying to make. Make sure each example directly supports your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay should follow a clear structure: introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. You've done this, but the transitions between your ideas are not always smooth. Use linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to make your conclusion more definitive. Summarize the main points you have made in your essay and clearly state your final opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar. This will make your essay easier to read and understand.
task response
You have chosen an interesting and relevant topic, and you provide both sides of the argument, which shows good understanding of the task.
task response
You have included personal examples which help to illustrate your points. This makes your essay more engaging.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.