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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of
foreigns
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foreign
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visitors
 to three varied places in a European country from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, the data showed that the number of tourists to all three different areas increased over the years. Despite
this
, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 to the lakes decreased dramatically in 2002, compared to the other two places in the country. It is
worthy
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to note
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 that, since 1987, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 to the mountains area never fell and stood out with approximately 35
thousands
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thousand
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visitors
 except saw the plateau
in
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between 1997 and 2002 with nearly 30
thousands
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thousand
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visitors
.
Similarly
, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 to the coast rose sharply
with
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to
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 nearly 75
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2007 despite
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a slightly
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slightly decreased
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slight decrease
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 in 1992. The
visitors
 to the lakes
one
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on
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 the other hand, with around 10
thousands
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thousand
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 people escalated substantially up to about 40
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1997 and again rose markedly up to nearly around 75
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2002 before it saw
dramatic
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a dramatic
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decreased
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 in 2007 with approximately 50
thousands
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thousand
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 tourists.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • popular destination
  • significant changes
  • peak
  • trough
  • speculate
  • geopolitical events
  • attractiveness
  • positive outlook
  • challenges
  • tourism industry
  • overseas visitors
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