Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Society suggests that young
students
should explore only subject-oriented literature
, whereas
others think that students
should also
be allowed to read fictional literature
. Subject themed
Add a hyphen
Subject-themed
literature
is a source
of knowledge
, therefore
it will affect youngsters’ intelligence. However
, literature
that contains fiction could also
make youngsters to be more expressive.
Academic literature
contains a plethora of information that could improve young peoples’
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people’s
knowledge
. In addition
, those are also
source
of Fix the agreement mistake
sources
science
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scientific
knowledges
that Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
important
for Add a missing verb
are important
peoples
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people
especially
the younger generations. Add the comma(s)
, especially
Consequently
, it will increase those generations' science
insights. Those insights are the biggest contributor to Replace the word
scientific
children
's intelligence. Studies show that children
who spend their reading time in science literatures
20% more than other types of Change the wording
literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
works of literature
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smarter than Wrong verb form
are
the
others who do the opposite. Correct article usage
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That is
evidence that the youth who spend their time in science-based literature
can improve their mind
ability.
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mental
Literature
is a source
of knowledge
. Reading them, whether for serious matters or for relaxation, can acquire a lot of information. Relaxational literature
usually contains fiction. That literature
usually utilises heavy language that is
new for younger societies. Those can be a medium for students
to learn a new language. As a consequence
, It can improve how well students
express their feelings. This
is also
supported by a social experiment that was recently being
conducted by Unnecessary verb
apply
popular
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the popular
children
TV show, MTV. They prompted the youngsters to read science-fiction Change noun form
children's
literature
two times a day for a month. Later on, they asked them various questions. It is shown that the childrens
who read those are more expressive than regular Correct your spelling
children
children
. That is
the
proof of how pleasure-based Change the article
apply
literature
could help the students
express their minds.
In Short, I think literature
, whether serious or relaxing, both are equally important. The serious literatures serve as source
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a source
scientific
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of scientific
knowledge
whereas
the others serves
as verbal Change the verb form
serve
knowledge
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General
Improve grammar and vocabulary to make your arguments clearer and more precise. For example, 'plethora of information' could be improved upon by saying 'a wealth of information.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Dedicate a paragraph for each main point and ensure that each body paragraph has a clear topic sentence. This makes your essay more structured and easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Provide more comprehensive examples to support your arguments. For instance, instead of broadly mentioning studies, cite specific studies or research papers.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both viewpoints and offers a balanced perspective.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and serve to frame the discussion.
Task Achievement
Relevant points are raised regarding the benefits of both academic and pleasure reading, which indicates a good understanding of the topic.
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