some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A few people feel it is more and more vital to afford
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money on roads and
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motorways
, which is
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placed public transport likely to railways and trams. Nowadays, with
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technological development so abundant often choose
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modern
and private
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essay. First of all, in today's
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humans have a hectic and strict
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schedule
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of
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and transportation
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to tackle problems.
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of the most
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is
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and comfortable
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anywhere with a wide street,
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transport system is limited
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time so the best way of solution is
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more and more money
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road. exception for wasting some time
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bus, changing to go to
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on the route.
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can afford enough demand of building road because it is necessary contacting to all rail with
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Make sure to clearly state your position on the topic in the introduction. Your position should be easy to identify.
coherence cohesion
Include a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion to reinforce your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas logically. Group related ideas into paragraphs, each with a clear focus.
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When presenting examples, make sure they are specific and relevant to the points you are making. This will strengthen your argument.
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Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly and enhance the overall flow of your essay.
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Edit and proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity, especially sentence structure and word choice.
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Clarify and expand on your main points to make your argument more comprehensive and easy to follow.
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You have made an effort to address the topic and have included some relevant ideas.
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You have attempted to support your main points with reasons and examples, even though they could be more specific and detailed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • public transport systems
  • economic growth
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon emissions
  • social equity
  • urban development
  • sustainable
  • mobility needs
  • revitalization
  • efficiency
  • safety
  • reliance
  • combatting
  • mitigating
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