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Write a letter to your friend to ask him/her to develop a website for your business. In your letter: Give a brief description of the business Mention what you’d like to be there on the website Provide some ideas on use of images on the web site.

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Dear Rahul. I hope
this
 letter finds you in the pink of your health. I am writing
this
 letter to ask you about developing a
website
 for my business. Well, I started my own footwear brand
last
 month In which I will sell unisex Crocs literide clog.
Initially
, I started alone but my father and younger brother joined and helped me out to start my venture.
Moreover
, I am planning to sell only one SKU at
this
 time but maybe In future when I want to expand my business that time I will be selling multiple SKUs at a time on my
website
. Let me explain what you should include on my
website
. The first and foremost thing Is design, you need to give a very authentic look to It.
Apart from
this
 a WhatsApp live chat button for customers who have any questions regarding my product.
Additionally
, you should add variation swatches of colours and sizes
according to
 product requirements.
Also
, you can use Pixels.com for stock images and videos to show a better understanding of my products. And I want clear and HD quality images only on my
website
. Awaiting your reply eagerly, looking forward to seeing you soon. Yours lovingly Biren
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coherence cohesion
Break longer paragraphs into shorter ones for better readability.
task achievement
Consider adding a brief introduction about why you chose your friend for this task, to personalize the letter further.
task achievement
Excellent use of a friendly and inviting tone appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Clear structure with greeting, body, and closing sections well defined.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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