The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from eggs to adult fish.

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The diagram illustrates various stages in the development of a

salmon

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, there are eight stages in the

life

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cycle

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of the

salmon

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, starting with eggs and continuing until they become

fully-grown

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adults.

At the first stage

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in the

life

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cycle

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, the female

salmon

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chooses the best spot in rivers and lays a massive number of eggs, which are

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incubated before developing into tiny

fish

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. At

this

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point, the

fish

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have a long tail and do not yet have the appearance of a normal

fish

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. In the next stage, the

fish

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grow quickly in size and move downstream to freshwater areas, which are suitable for rearing, before migrating to estuaries where they continue to be reared. At the following stage in the

life

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cycle

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, the young

fish

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become much bigger and begin their journey to the ocean where they develop into mature adult

salmon

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. The adult

fish

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migrate upstream to spawning areas of rivers where they will mate and spawn, and the

life

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cycle

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starts again.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, life, cycle, fish with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from eggs to adult fish.

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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