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When asked to choose between a life without work and working most f the time, people would always chppse not to work. Do you aree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many believe that living without
work
 is a great way when they choose between spending most
time
 working or not working. From my point of view,
although
 people may have relaxation during stopping working, they should keep
this
 to meet the demands of their lives. It is obvious that many people, especially old adults will have their own
time
 to be free if they do not
work
. It is of assistance of spending
time
 on their important things
such
 as having vocation with their children or unwinding their mind.
For example
, the elderly who do not
work
 can be able to take care of themselves effectively and have good memories with friends or family members; leading to receiving comfortable and remarkable moments.
On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks unless teenagers
work
. Concerning the former, they do not have enough money to serve many necessary purposes
such
 as accommodation or food.
Therefore
, if youngsters do not find occupations, they will not only afford their demands, but it will
also
 affect their families because of a shortage of money.
Furthermore
, young adults may face difficulties early
due to
 having to depend on their parents.
As a result
, their finance becomes more and more difficult. In conclusion,
while
 many choose to
work
 most of the
time
, others want to live without
work
. The disadvantages outweigh the benefits of
this
 phenomenon.

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task achievement
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and provide relevant examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas smoothly within and between paragraphs to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Expand on how not working affects different age groups and provide more detailed reasons.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, which aids in demonstrating a logical structure.
task achievement
The response addresses the main issue and offers valid points discussing both sides of the argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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