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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment

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Contained in the footprint is the new layout of
office
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 construction and prediction for its changes.
Overall
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, there are four
office
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 rooms, a store
room
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 and 2 entrances will be kept
remained
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remaining
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,
while
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 grass, kitchen and canteen will be taken
place
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 by some new services.
Additionally
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, the size of the
place
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 is not going to change in the future. At the present day, the building is separated into
two
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 areas which is the main section contains 4 offices and some facilities
such
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 as a kitchen or canteen,
two
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 entrances take
place
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 in the left and southern east of the building. The other side is
two
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 grass which put 2
two
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 sides. Into the
room
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 are eight rooms which are four offices, a kitchen, a canteen storeroom and WCs that are arranged respectively on the top and below of the
room
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. Moving on to the predicted building, the entrance and
office
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 will remain, but there are some differences between locations.
Two
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office
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room
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rooms
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is
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are
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 taking
place
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 on the top of the
room
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 and
entrance
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the entrance
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 will be moved to the centre of
side
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the side
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 between
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two
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the two
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 offices. The right sight will be replaced with new facilities like a coffee machine and a meeting
room
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 with 2 chairs,
while
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 the other side is put are for outdoor seating
as well as
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 some chairs in the opposition.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, room, place, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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