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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows the rate of illiteracy in different parts of the world,
broen
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broken
doen
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down
 into
men
 and
women
last
 year.
Overall
, we can see that there is a big difference in different
part
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parts
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 of the world but that
women
 are much less likely to be able to be literate. we can see people
libing
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living
lining
 in
sub saharan
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sub-Saharan
africa
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Africa
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, south
asia
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Asia
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, and arab states are much more likely to be illiterate. approximately half
women
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of women
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 in these countries
is
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are
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 unable to read or write with the figure as high as 56% in south
asia
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Asia
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.
however
, the figure for
men
 is lower, at around 30%.
however
,
this
 is still high.
in contrast
, in other
countries
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countries,
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 the vast majority of people read and write. in developed
countris
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countries
 nearly everybody is literate.
however
, there are
slight
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slightly
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 more
women
 with illiteracy than
men
. in east
asia
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Asia
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 and
oceania
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Oceania
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it is clear that
 there is
big
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a big
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 difference between
men
 and
women
. less than ten
percent
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per cent
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 of
men
 are illiterate but
women
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for women
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 the figure is more
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than
thand
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than
 double at 20%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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