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Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

#people #risks
Every
person
 has a different point of perspective towards seeing
things
 some believe that whatever work they are doing well is already good rather
then
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than
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 taking a risk and shifting to a new workplace
while
 others believe that trying new
things
while
 taking
risks
 is good . I strongly believe in the second view because of the following reasons .
To begin
 with , It has some positive and negative
impact
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impacts
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 Talking about sticking to one job post in which we are already good will make you feel bored to some extent and you will have less knowledge about other jobs. Because we will lose opportunity in other sectors . If that particular sector goes down in the job market
then
 the
person
 will not be able to switch to
other
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another
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 job post
due to
 lack of experience
For instance
, I am working for a company and my main task is not different
i
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 repeat the same task every day I will feel like
its
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it's
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 nothing new to learn . Next comes trying new tasks and learning new skills which leads him to be successful . A
person
 who repeats similar
things
 cannot learn new skills
besides
 he or she will have fears to try and will be afraid of failing.
Furthermore
, if one does not try novel skills and risky decisions will stay in his comfort zone. A
person
 who seeks innovation and has the courage to take
risks
 will always be in search of new opportunities and new solutions for any problem.If you are stuck on someone thing you will never be successful .
To sum up
, successful people embrace new
things
 and
risks
.
This
 is because taking
risks
 and trying new
things
 is not only interesting but
also
 helps people to confront new experiences.
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