The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
Given are two charts providing a comparison of
Japanese
tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995,
as well as
the certain
percentages
of
Japanese
tourist
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tourists
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visiting Australia. It can be inferred from the illustration that the number of
Japanese
tourists travelling abroad climbed steadily from 5
millions
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people in 1985 to approximately 11
millions
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million
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in 1990. But in 1991, the
Japanese
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number of Japanese
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travellers
decrease
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steadily to 10.5
millions
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. Before soaring to a staggering 15
millions
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in 1995, the number of
travellers
remained stable between 1992 and 1994 with 13
million
travellers
. It is
also
interesting to note that only 2
percent
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out of 5
million
travellers
in 1985 went to Australia. The
percentages
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of
the
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Japanese
tourists in
Australi
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Australia
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went up steadily to 5
percent
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from 9.5
million
in 1989.
However
, in 1990, the
percentages
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percentage
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slipped to approximately 4.2
percent
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. By far the highest
percentages
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percentage
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of
Japanese
visited Australia in 1994 with 6.2
percent
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per cent
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from
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of
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13.5
million
people,
by contrast
in
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last
year, the
percentages
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percentage
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dropped steadily to 6
percent
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per cent
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out of 15
million
travellers
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, percentages, millions, travellers, million, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist market
  • overseas travel
  • tourism industry
  • international campaigns
  • economic prosperity
  • travel preferences
  • market share
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trend
  • attracting
  • destination
  • variability
  • contributing factors
  • currency exchange rates
  • speculate
  • tourism policies
  • competitive markets
  • popularity
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