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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
air
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pollution
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 levels in four different nations, namely China, America,
Japan
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, and
Australia
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, through the year 2012.
Overall
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, it is evident that Electricity generation was the most heavily polluted category in
three
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the three
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 countries, except for
Australia
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, where the highest number of
air
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pollution
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 levels was in
Industry
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. In terms of China, the
air
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pollution
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 level in
Industry
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 was the highest, at exactly 80
PPM
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. The data on Transport was lower, at 70
PPM
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.
Industry
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,
however
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, accounted for the lowest value, at just under 60
PPM
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. Turning towards the three remaining countries, America,
Japan
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, and
Australia
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, the information on
air
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pollution
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 in Electricity generation was 30
PPM
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, approximately 15
PPM
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, and about 20
PPM
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, respectively. The figure for Transport in America was around 59
PPM
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, which was twice as much as the data
on
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in
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Japan
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, compared to nearly 20
PPM
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 in
Australia
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. Meanwhile,
Japan
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's
air
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pollution
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 level in
industry
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 was just above 40
PPM
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,
while
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 the level in two other areas ranged between 19
PPM
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 and 29
PPM
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, japan, australia, industry, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollutants
  • Industrialization
  • Regulations
  • Geographical factors
  • Emissions
  • Air quality
  • Carbon dioxide (CO2)
  • Particulate matter (PM)
  • Nitrogen oxides (NOx)
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Comparative analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
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