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The chart below shows the number of films produced in five countries in three years.

The chart below shows the number of films produced in five countries in three years.
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The bar chart delineates the amount of
films
 produced in 5 countries, over the period of 3 years, beginning in 2007. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is obvious that the figure
of
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movies
 in 3 countries B,C and E experienced an upward trend,
while
 A and D registered a downward trend. As the number of
films
 in A was the highest, country E was the lowest. There was a slight going up in the number of
movies
 produced by B from 2007 to 2008 (50
films
 became 52
films
), followed by a sharp increase to 70
movies
 in 2009. The
films
 produced by A stayed steady between 2007 and 2008 at approximately 87
programs
, before falling gradually to 80
films
 in 2009. In comparison with the figure of
films
 made in C, which was a moderate rise from about 9
movies
 to 17
movies
 over the period of 3
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, the amount of
programs
 in D grew gradually between 2007 and 2008 ( around 15
programs
 became 9
programs
) and after 1 year the number of
films
 produced started to growth but not significant (grew to 13
films
). There was a slow increase in the amount of
movies
 in E between 2007 and 2009 (from around 9
movies
 to 11
movies
).
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