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The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the size of classes in primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts give information regarding the class
size
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 of primary schools in four different
Australian
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 states in 2010.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that 21-25
students
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 is the most prevalent
size
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 in most states, with the exception being South
Australia
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.
In addition
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, it is
also
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 worth noting that
classes
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 rarely exceed 30
students
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. With regard to New South Wales, the proportion of
classes
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 within the 20 or lower student range constituted 26%, which was 10% lower than that of South
Australia
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. The percentage of
classes
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 containing 21-25
students
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,
on the other hand
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, represented 37% in New South Wales,
whereas
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 South
Australia
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 took up only 33%. A similar discrepancy could be seen in the 26-30 student
size
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, where New South Wales was 5% higher than its Southern counterpart. The remaining 4% of both states represented the
classes
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 with over 30
students
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. As for the
Australian
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 Capital
Territory
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 and Western
Australia
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, the 21-25 student class
size
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 took up the largest percentage, constituting 51% and 42% respectively.
Furthermore
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, one-tenth of the
classes
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 in
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Australian
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the Australian
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 Capital
territory
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 consisted of 26-30
students
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, which was 17% lower than Western
Australia
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's. In terms of the
classes
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 with fewer than 20
students
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, 38% was the proportion in
Australia
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's Capital
Territory
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,
whereas
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 Western
Australia
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 had over a quarter of all
classes
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. The statistic relating to
classes
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 with a minimum of 30
students
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 is just 5% in Western
Australia
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, which was 5 times higher than in the
Australian
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 capital
territory
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, australian, students, australia, classes, territory with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary school
  • class size
  • proportion
  • average
  • trends
  • small/medium/large classes
  • implications
  • quality of education
  • teacher workload
  • comparison
  • variance
  • state-by-state analysis
  • education policy
  • statistical representation
  • pie chart interpretation
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