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The bar chart shows the average prices of per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.

The bar chart shows the average prices of per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
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Demonstrated in the provided chart is the money paid for each kilometre
clothes
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of clothes
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 which is exported to
Europeand
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Europe and
European
Union
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the Union
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 by six distinctive nations, compared between the years 1993 and 2003. Units are measured in pounds.
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, it can be seen apparently that the prices of clothing from Argentina and Japan had a downward trend,
while
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 China, India, and Bangladesh increased up to twice after a decade. Another point
roth
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worth
 mentioning is that Brazil products' expense did not see any change. In terms of Argentina, the wear had the highest value in both years despite a slight decrease from 28 to 26. The cost of
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 item imported from Japan
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 went down
with
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 the same speed (15 to 13).
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, clothing's charge
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 Brazil stood at 23 after the ten-year period. As for Bangladesh, the price went up and reached
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 point as twice as in the beginning year (3 to 6),
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, it remained
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last
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.
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, China and India rose significantly, with 10 and 7 in 1993,
17
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and 17
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 and 12 in 2003 respectively.

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