The two maps below show road access to the hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The two maps below show road access to the hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The maps illustrate how the infrastructure around the city hospital changed from 2007 to 2010. In 2007, to enter the city hospital two junctions needed to be passed. There were six bus stops allocated across Hospital
Road
, three on each side.
In addition
, the car park was for both the staff and the public and was located between the City
Road
and the Ring
Road
, in the southeast. In 2010, the access to the hospital had changed,
however
, all the roads remained. The junctions were replaced by roundabouts. The original parking area was replaced with a staff car park,
as well as
a new public car park was added in the east of the hospital, from the Ring
Road
. Bus stops were demolished, and a new bus station was built and allocated between the roundabouts in the southwest, before the Ring
Road
.
Overall
, from 2007 to 2010 access to the hospital became safe, the parking area was extended and personalized, and
public
Correct article usage
the public
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transport location
upgraded
Add a missing verb
was upgraded
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.
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