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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

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Some communities opine that
waste
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 from houses is usually not recycled. So they propose that the authority can bring about a change in society by imposing strict
laws
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 on recycling, which can be an effective way to increase the recycling rate among the public. I strongly agree with
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 statement to an extent. I think the
government
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 should initiate environmental protection
laws
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 so that
people
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 are educated about it and implement it in their lives. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will be explaining my views on the same. Over the years, we have been taught that
waste
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/disposals can be pulled off in an efficient manner by simply focusing on the 3 R’s, which stand for Reduce, Reuse, and Recycle.
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 the 3 R’s are very effective, they’re pretty hard to implement.
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, the state should implement
laws
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 and regulations that solely focus on helping the nation to reduce
waste
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/disposal and reuse products.
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, the
government
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 should start campaigns on the importance of recycling
waste
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 and teach everyone to practise the recycling process and reuse those products.
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, the schools can
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 educate the students about the environmental impact and significance of the recycling and reusing process so that they can divide and pack the recyclable and non-recyclable wastes and later dump them into the recycling bins.
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, the
government
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 should initiate legal regulations and
laws
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 related to recycling management, so that the public may adopt and follow these environmental practices as there are some
people
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 who abide only by the
government
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 rules.
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, the authority can facilitate recycling facilities in each city by distributing compost bins.
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 way, the environment will be much cleaner and greener. The environment will be significantly affected and polluted if
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 do not follow the recycling process or throw away the disposals properly. Some folk think it is individual responsibility and
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 does not need to be made a law. But if not for
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, no one cares to be responsible.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe that
people
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 should be encouraged to recycle
waste
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 products and if the governments and citizens keep up their efforts,
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 we can definitely preserve and protect our environmental resources for future generations to come.
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task achievement
Although your essay is well-structured and your arguments are clear, try to include more specific, relevant examples to strengthen your points. For instance, mentioning successful recycling programs in other countries can provide stronger support.
coherence cohesion
Some sections could benefit from smoother transitions between ideas. While your overall structure is good, adding a few linking phrases or words between sentences and paragraphs can help improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
There are some small grammar and phrasing issues that, while not affecting the overall message, could be refined for a more polished piece. Consider having someone proofread your essay, or use tools to catch minor errors.
task achievement
You have provided a comprehensive response to the task and addressed various aspects of the topic effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are clearly articulated and logically organized, which makes your essay easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are nicely framed, providing a good start and closure to your arguments.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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