ou live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear sir or madam
I am writing to inform you of my dissatisfaction
to
my new Change preposition
with
room
in college, which I have to share with another person. This
new situation gives me some difficulties I cannot do my work perfectly anymore.
My roommate is studying music and he is always doing some tasks related to it such
as practicing guitar all day. Other classmates always gather in our room
to have practical sessions or handle new projects they are involved with. While
it is a necessary task for him, he always make
noises by playing his instrument Change the verb form
makes
that
I Correct word choice
so that
am not be
able to concentrate on my work . Change the verb form
am not
On the other
hand
I Add a comma
hand,
am always have
to tolerate their gathering because the Change the verb form
always have
room
is really small and we do not have enough space to have our separate individual privacy.
I would prefer to have a private room
or at least share it with another master's degree student who is in the same condition as me. It definitely could help me to do my best for my final dissertation.
I hope that you will address these problem
for me .
Yours faithfully.
Ostore hassani.Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
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task achievement
The description of the situation and problems is clear, but providing more specific examples or details could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is generally well-organized, consider breaking up the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs to better differentiate between different problems.
task achievement
You have politely and clearly explained the issue and your preferred solution.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and greeting are appropriate and formal.