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The charts below gives information the sources of electricity in four countries from 2003 and 2008.

The charts below gives information the sources of electricity in four countries from 2003 and 2008.
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The pie charts compare percentages of three electricity
recourses
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as
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fossil
fuel
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, hydropower and nuclear
power
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 in
India
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,
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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 and
Vietnam
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 between 2003 and 2008.
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,
India
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 owns the highest amount of fossil
fuel
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 at 61.9%,
meanwhile
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Sweden
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 has the
least
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lowest
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 percentage of it at 4%.
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, as it is shown on the chart,
Sweden
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 possesses the most
of
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nuclear
power
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 at 44%,
while
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Morocco
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 and
Vietnam
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 do not even have it at all.
India
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 wields the most fossil
fuel
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 at 81.9%,
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Sweden
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 has the least of it at only 4%, but the most nuclear
power
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 at 44%, meanwhile
India
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 has the least of
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 source at only 3.5%. The percentages of nuclear
power
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 in
Sweden
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 and hydropower in
Vietnam
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 are closely similar at 44% in
Sweden
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 and 43.7% in
Vietnam
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.
Morocco
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 bears the most hydropower
comparing
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 to
other
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the other
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 three countries at 95.5%,
while
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India
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 has the
least
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lowest
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 percentage
of
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it
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at 14.6%.
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, percentages in
Sweden
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 and
Morocco
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 are
also
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 similar, but in fossil
fuel
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 at 4.5% in
Morocco
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 and 4% in
Sweden
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, power, india, sweden, morocco, vietnam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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