The charts below gives information the sources of electricity in four countries from 2003 and 2008.

The charts below gives information the sources of electricity in four countries from 2003 and 2008.
The pie charts compare percentages of three electricity
recourses
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resources
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as
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fossil
fuel
, hydropower and nuclear
power
in
India
,
Sweden
,
Morocco
and
Vietnam
between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
,
India
owns the highest amount of fossil
fuel
at 61.9%,
meanwhile
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Sweden
has the
least
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lowest
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percentage of it at 4%.
Also
, as it is shown on the chart,
Sweden
possesses the most
of
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nuclear
power
at 44%,
while
Morocco
and
Vietnam
do not even have it at all.
India
wields the most fossil
fuel
at 81.9%,
while
Sweden
has the least of it at only 4%, but the most nuclear
power
at 44%, meanwhile
India
has the least of
this
source at only 3.5%. The percentages of nuclear
power
in
Sweden
and hydropower in
Vietnam
are closely similar at 44% in
Sweden
and 43.7% in
Vietnam
.
Morocco
bears the most hydropower
comparing
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to
other
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three countries at 95.5%,
while
India
has the
least
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lowest
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percentage
of
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it
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at 14.6%.
Moreover
, percentages in
Sweden
and
Morocco
are
also
similar, but in fossil
fuel
at 4.5% in
Morocco
and 4% in
Sweden
.
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