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You are going abroad on holiday and your friend will stay in your home while you are away. write a letter to your friend, in your letter : a. explain where you hide the keys b. describe what your friend needs to do in your absance c. say when you are coming back

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I hope you are good healthy. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I will go
out side
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outside
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from
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of
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 my
house
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go
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to go
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holiday
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on holiday
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 to go
to
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outside. You may stay in my home to
leave
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live
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 there until I come back. Before you come to stay at my
house
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, I will tell you that I have locked all of my
door
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doors
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, if you want to open the door I put the keys beside
rige
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ride
 the wall. After you get the keys
so
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you must stay at my home.
On the other hand
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,
i
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I
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 have some
works
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work
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 in my home
to
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for
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 you,
for
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to
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do
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doing
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 the
assigment
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assignment
 like, you should
cleaan
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clean
 the living room and you must
to
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apply
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disses the plate,
also
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 water the flower around
environment
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the environment
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 at my
house
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 you must take
bath
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a bath
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my
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with my
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 cat
,
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 because I really miss
the
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animal.
furthere more
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Furthermore
 I will tell you that
i
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I
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 come back to my
house
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 probably
two
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in two
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 weeks again, and I still want to holiday
together with
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may
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my
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 big family. thank you for your attention and your advice and I am looking forward to hearing you soon. Your SIncerely SAPARWADI.

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suitable writing tone
Be sure to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter to keep it friendly but clear. Avoid repetitive phrases like 'go outside' and focus on clarity.
logical structure
Try to organize your thoughts more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, and make sure you use complete and accurate sentences.
logical structure
Consider rephrasing some sentences for better accuracy, e.g., 'I will be on holiday for two weeks.'
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite tone which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
You have structured your letter with an introduction and a conclusion, which provides clarity.
complete response
You have covered the main points required: hiding the keys, tasks for your friend, and your return date.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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