You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, with the
hug
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influx of
individuals
moving out from the
countrysides
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countryside
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to live in
modren
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modern
cities
, a
sparked
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debate regarding whether living in big
cities
is bad for people’s
health
, proponents believe it is related to
individuals
'
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, and has nothing to do with living in
cities
.
However
, others and I argue
otherwise
. I am convinced that living in
modren
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modern
and big
cities
indirectly
effects
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affects
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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health
.
To begin
with,
although
living in towns
have
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several advantages, it can
brings
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countless
issues
, including
health
issues
. To illustrate, people tend to live in
cities
, seeking for new job
opporunities
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opportunities
, high-quality education and healthcare.
However
, large
cities
contain
number
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a number
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of
issues
, given the fast-paced nature of life.
Individuals
how
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who
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are living in
cities
usually tend to eat fast food and prep meals which all contain preservatives,
additives
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and additives
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that affect the body and well-being.
Hence
,
on
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in
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the long run,
individuals
may suffer from dangerous, even deadly
health
issues
.
Moreover
,
cities
suffer from
sever
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severe
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air pollution, water pollution, and more. These
issues
will significantly
effect
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affect
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a
person
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person's
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health
, leading to more challenging
health
issues
.
For example
, studies have shown that
individuals
who are living in the
countrysides
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countryside
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are more likely to live longer than those who do not.
This
because
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is because
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they are not
expouse
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exposed
expose
to
differents
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different
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bad emissions that
emitted
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are emitted
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from
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by
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industries, cars, and houses.
Thus
, living in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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mean fresh air, healthy food, and clean water. In conclusion,
after
this
essay has considered the mentioned points, it can reiterate that despite the
benefites
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benefits
big
cities
offers
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, there are demanding
issues
associated with it.
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grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy, especially with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Additionally, take care of spelling errors like 'modren' instead of 'modern' and 'hug' instead of 'huge'.
examples
Provide more specific examples or statistics to support your points. For instance, you could include data on urban pollution levels or health studies comparing urban and rural populations.
cohesive devices
Improve the clarity of transitions between paragraphs. Using more cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'moreover') can help guide the reader through your argument.
balanced view
The essay provides a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument before clearly stating your own stance.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • overcrowding
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • work pressures
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • lack of exercise
  • pandemics
  • green spaces
  • affordability
  • healthcare services
  • recreational facilities
  • cosmopolitan
  • diversity
  • personal development
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