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Topic: The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Wetherby at the beginning pf the 21st Century.

Topic: The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Wetherby at the beginning pf the 21st Century.
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The supplied maps illustrate a plethora of changes that
had
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occurred in
the
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Wetherby
town
 between 2000 and 2016.
Overall
; a number of dramatic developments took place which altered the layout of the
town
 completely within the period. It is clearly shown that the northern part of the main street underwent significant
alters
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. The farmland was replaced by the housing complex in the northwest of the
town
.
While
 the woodland remained flat, the houses
in
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 the right of it were demolished to build the blocks of
flat
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flats
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.
Similarly
, the disused car factory was converted into
the
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techno park
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technopark
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.
According to
 the south part of the main street, the housing with gardens in the west of the
town
 was replaced
to
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by
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hotel
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the hotel
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 with
spa
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a spa
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.
Moreover
, the open-air food market next to it was turned into
supermarket
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a supermarket
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, and the shops in the east
was
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 knocked down to make way for a multi-story car park.
Although
 the square remained flat in the same location, some trees were cultivated in it.
Finally
, the office block in the south of the
town
 was extended and replaced the cottage with gardens.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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