In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? ive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own nowledge or experience.
In many cultures,
children
are raised with the saying (if you try hard enough everything is achievable), I am going to discuss the pros and cons of planting this
idea in the minds of children
and why I am opposed to it.
In the beginning
let me mention some of the advantages mentioned by some people, they believe that raising Add a comma
beginning,
children
with the idea that nothing is impossible will give them the motivation and confidence needed to work hard for their dreams no matter how big the goal is. parents who use this
method trust that building the mentality of success in the brain of children
is the key to better feature
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in some cultures young children
are encouraged only if they reached
a certain goal regardless of the effort made by them.
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on the other hand
, some cultures raise their offspring with the message that (effort does not always pay off), And I totally agree with that from a personal experience, telling a child that everything is possible if you put enough work into it will reflect negatively on them when they don't get the results they expected after working hard, leaving them feeling weak and unworthy, and might even frustrate them from trying again. For instance
, if we tell someone that if you study hard enough you will 100% be able to attend medical school, and they graduate top of their class but can't go to college due to
financial problems it will reflect badly on their morale and psychological status. Success has many factors such
as opportunity, economy, effort and many other factors. Parents should reward attempts regardless of the results to create a culture of resilience.
lastly
, in my point of view, the cons are greater than the pros. raising anyone with the idea that efforts always pay off is not realistic and may lead to bad consequences on the morale of the whole generation.Submitted by llaora on
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