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The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.

The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
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The diagram presents the
compariosn
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comparison
 of approximated
prices
 for one
kilometre
 of imported clothing
into
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 six
countries
 of
European
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the European
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 Union between 1993 and 2003.
Overall
,
it is clear that
highest
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the highest
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prices
clothing
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of clothing
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 sold in 6
European
natiuons
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nations
 belong to clothes exported from Argentina and
Brazil
. The cheaper ones are from
countries
 in Asia despite their longer
distanace
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distance
 to Europe. It is interesting that
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there is a rise in
prices
 of clothing imported from Asia, but they remain cheaper when compared to those imported from the two
countries
 in South America. In 1993, the highest price of clothing sold in
European
countries
 belonged to clothing made in Argentina, accounting for approximately 27
pounds
 per
kilometre
. Followed by those of
Brazil
, the average
prices
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price
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 per
kilometre
 was
at
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around 22.50
pounds
. Japan, China, India, and Bangladesh
also
 sold their clothing products to
European
countries
,
accoiunting
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accounting
for 15, 10, 7.50 and 2.50
pounds
 respectively. It is obvious that most of them changed in 2003, except for
that
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of
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Brazil
 which remained stable at 22.50
pounds
 per
kilometre
. The price of clothing from
Brazil
 dropped to a little over 25
pounds
.
Likewise
, Japanese clothing
price
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prices
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 went down to lower than 15
pounds
, which contradicted those of China, India and Bangladesh, accounting for the rise to over 15, 10 and 5
pounds
 in order.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, kilometre, countries, european, brazil, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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