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The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.

The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003.
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The diagram presents the
compariosn
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comparison
 of approximated
prices
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 for one
kilometre
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 of imported clothing
into
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in
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 six
countries
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 of
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European
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the European
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 Union between 1993 and 2003.
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,
it is clear that
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highest
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the highest
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prices
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clothing
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of clothing
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 sold in 6
European
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natiuons
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nations
 belong to clothes exported from Argentina and
Brazil
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. The cheaper ones are from
countries
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 in Asia despite their longer
distanace
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distance
 to Europe. It is interesting that
the
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there is a rise in
prices
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 of clothing imported from Asia, but they remain cheaper when compared to those imported from the two
countries
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 in South America. In 1993, the highest price of clothing sold in
European
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countries
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 belonged to clothing made in Argentina, accounting for approximately 27
pounds
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 per
kilometre
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. Followed by those of
Brazil
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, the average
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prices
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price
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 per
kilometre
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 was
at
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apply
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around 22.50
pounds
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. Japan, China, India, and Bangladesh
also
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 sold their clothing products to
European
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countries
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,
accoiunting
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accounting
for 15, 10, 7.50 and 2.50
pounds
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 respectively. It is obvious that most of them changed in 2003, except for
that
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apply
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of
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Brazil
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 which remained stable at 22.50
pounds
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 per
kilometre
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. The price of clothing from
Brazil
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 dropped to a little over 25
pounds
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.
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, Japanese clothing
price
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prices
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 went down to lower than 15
pounds
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, which contradicted those of China, India and Bangladesh, accounting for the rise to over 15, 10 and 5
pounds
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 in order.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, kilometre, countries, european, brazil, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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