Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's live. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Regardless of age, every person is looking out in the world to be happy. Some relate happy moments with a lack of obligations.
On the other hand
, others think that the adult years bring more joy as they are more independent though with responsibilities. In Linking Words
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essay, I will give the perspectives from both sides and Linking Words
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explain why the former carries more weight than the latter.
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time
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together with
the care received from parents. With Linking Words
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freedom, they have enough Linking Words
time
for themselves to do the things that they love to do. Given the ample amount of Use synonyms
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, they can use it to spend with their friends, watch movies and have game nights, enjoying life to the fullest . Use synonyms
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, they do not have the stress that most adults have, Linking Words
such
as to make both ends meet. Even if they have problems at school, Linking Words
for instance
, completing their homework or some projects, they have their parents to help them out to solve those.
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On the other hand
, adult years seem to be the best part of life for some Linking Words
due to
the freedom to pave their own path. Linking Words
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is because, during their childhood, they were under some restrictions from their elders. The paucity of money compounds the matter. As they cross their teenage years, they are happy to be out of Linking Words
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barriers. The financial freedom gives them the opportunity to do what they admire like buying a new car or travelling to new places.
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Although
both sides point out good views, I believe that the enjoyment during teenage outweighs the other. It is true that they have some limitations in their decision-making but they do not have a lot of challenges that their parents face. I do believe that if adults can find a balance between their busy lives and doing what they love, they can be truly happy too.
In conclusion, teenagers can enjoy their lives Linking Words
due to
their absence of responsibilities and the ample amount of Linking Words
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However
, adults too can find happiness if they can strike a balance between their challenging lives and doing what they admire. "Happiness is a choice. It is not relative to your circumstances. You are in charge". If we truly understand Linking Words
this
, we should be able to be happy at all times.Linking Words
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You provided a balanced discussion of both views before presenting your own opinion, fulfilling the task requirement excellently.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both strong, clearly outlining the essay's purpose and summarizing your main points effectively.
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