Schools should focus more on teaching students how to be successful in the workforce and less on helping them to achieve academic success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days, the learning system has been evolving, and governments are investigating to find the best way which help students learn better, and be successful in their jobs there some people believe a career is really more important than academic learning, so schools must teach how to be a workforce. I broadly agree with
this
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have a relation with each other and learning one of them cannot help us to become successful.
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after graduation they cannot find a good job, for they just know some theoretical things, and when they start the job they are not able to do their Linking Words
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As a result
, universities have internships. To learn how can use lessons in Linking Words
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summer I finished my bachelor’s. Later, I spend 3 months in the Isfahan oil refinery. It was a good experience for me to learn to use academic lessons in real Linking Words
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for oil refineries, and for every situation have to ask from supervisor.
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, they can train good workers for society.Linking Words
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