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In many countries, students take a year off finishing school should students take a gap year before attending university? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is true that in many countries before
students
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 attend
university
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, they take a
year
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 off and try to rest. I believe that spending one
year
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 on recreation can benefit
students
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 in their future studies.
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,
this
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 idea has its benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, taking a
year
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 off before joining the
university
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 can have some negative aspects. In the beginning, pupils can forget many subjects of their lessons if they don't review them at all.
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, when I changed my field of study at the
university
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, I forgot many mathematics topics because I had six months off.
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, many
students
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 only focus on recreational activities
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 of dividing their time between leisure and study activities.
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, it could be a waste of time, and
students
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 should avoid that.
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 taking a
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 off after finishing school has negative sides, I believe they are limited, and we can ignore them.
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, spending a
year
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 off to rest before attending
university
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 can be beneficial for many
students
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. The most important advantage of
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 idea is that they can give their brains a break.
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, in Iran, there is an exam called Konkur
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 very frustrating and overwhelming for
students
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 because they have to devote their whole time to preparing for it. Another benefit of taking a
year
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 off after finishing school worth mentioning is that
students
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 could learn new skills or they can improve their weaknesses. I remember that I had a problem with linear algebra, so before going to
university
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, I bought a book and started to learn the topics that I was not good at. In conclusion, taking a
year
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 off before attending
university
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 has its pros and cons. Despite understanding the drawbacks, I believe that the advantages outweigh its negative sides; so it can be a good idea for
students
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 to rest for one
year
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 after they finish school.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • independence
  • work experience
  • future employment
  • exploration of interests
  • informed decision
  • travel opportunities
  • broaden horizons
  • academic burnout
  • refresh and recharge
  • financial savings
  • academic momentum
  • study habits
  • academic discipline
  • wasted time
  • proper planning
  • transition difficulties
  • adjustment issues
  • social disconnect
  • peers
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