The chart and table give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at lea
The presented chart and table
gives
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give
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data about
tourists
at a
certainholyday
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certain holiday
resort in Australia.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in
chart
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the chart
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there
was
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were
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more Asian and
Europian
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European
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tourists
than other
region
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regions
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tourists
.
Also
in
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the table
a table
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table
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table,
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it is clear that
more time
stayed
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was spent
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there was
Europian
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European
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tourits
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tourists
, the most popular there was Camping or Caravan and the most popular
activity
there was Sightseeing. In accordance with
chart
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the chart
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more people from Asia and Europe are was more than
USA
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the USA
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or other region tourist and
was
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were
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with
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almost
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an almost
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equal count that 37% and 35%,
while
count
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the count
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of people from
USA
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the USA
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was 18%
from
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of
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all
tourists
there
was
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apply
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.
However
, number of
tourists
from other regions was 10%.
Furthermore
, in agreement with
table
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the table
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Asian
tourists
was staing
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stayed
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in
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an
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average
7
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of 7
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days
,
most
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the most
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popular
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
they
was staying
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stayed
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in was
5-star
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a 5-star
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hotel and
main
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the main
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activity
they
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apply
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were
doing
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apply
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sightseeing.
Moreover
,
Europian
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European
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people
in
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on
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average
was staying
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stayed
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16
days
,
prefered
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preferred
to stay by camping or caravan rather than in
5-star
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a 5-star
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hotel and
main
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their main
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activity
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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was swimming or sunbathing.
Then
American
tourists
in
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on
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average
were
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staying
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stayed
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14
days
, was
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stayin
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staying
in 4-star
hotel
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hotels
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and
they
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apply
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choose
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chose
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sightseeing as
activity
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an activity
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. Meanwhile, Other
region
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regional
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tourists
was
staying
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stayed
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in
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for
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10
days
also
prefered
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preferred
to
camping
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camp
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or caravan and
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choose
choosed
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chose
to surf
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, activity, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.

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  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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