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gives
data about Correct subject-verb agreement
give
tourists
at a certainholyday
resort in Australia.
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certain holiday
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, it is clear that
in chart
there Add an article
the chart
was
more Asian and Change the verb form
were
Europian
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European
tourists
than other region
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regions
tourists
.
Also
in Add an article
the table
a table
table
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table,
it is clear that
more time stayed
there was Wrong verb form
was spent
Europian
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European
tourits
, the most popular there was Camping or Caravan and the most popular Correct your spelling
tourists
activity
there was Sightseeing.
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more people from Asia and Europe are was more than Correct article usage
the chart
USA
or other region tourist and Correct article usage
the USA
was
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were
with
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apply
almost
equal count that 37% and 35%, Add an article
an almost
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while
count
of people from Add an article
the count
a count
USA
was 18% Correct article usage
the USA
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of
tourists
there was
. Unnecessary verb
apply
However
, number of tourists
from other regions was 10%.
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, in agreement with table
Asian Correct article usage
the table
tourists
was staing
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stayed
in
averageCorrect your spelling
an
7
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of 7
days
, most
popular Correct article usage
the most
accomodation
they Correct your spelling
accommodation
accommodations
was staying
in was Wrong verb form
stayed
5-star
hotel and Add an article
a 5-star
main
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the main
activity
they
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apply
doing
sightseeing. Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, Europian
people Correct your spelling
European
in
average Change preposition
on
was staying
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stayed
days
, prefered
to stay by camping or caravan rather than in Correct your spelling
preferred
5-star
hotel and Add an article
a 5-star
main
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their main
activity
of
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apply
them
was swimming or sunbathing. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Then
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in
average Change preposition
on
were
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apply
staying
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stayed
days
, was
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apply
stayin
in 4-star Correct your spelling
staying
hotel
and Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
they
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apply
choose
sightseeing as Wrong verb form
chose
activity
. Meanwhile, Other Correct article usage
an activity
region
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regional
tourists
was staying
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stayed
in
10 Change preposition
for
days
also
prefered
to Correct your spelling
preferred
camping
or caravan and Replace the word
camp
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choose
choosed
to surfCorrect your spelling
chose
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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